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The Death Knight's Journey
A tale of a warrior from hell!
Chp1 Scene 7
PostPosted by: Sparda004 Thu Nov 17, 2005 @ 07:54am



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Herufaia Tenma
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commentCommented on: Sat Nov 19, 2005 @ 04:04am
Hmmm many many typos u should fix

ummm try not to make it so choppy when you describe things like the legionaires

Wall of lightning? i have a hard time visualizing that put more detail into it make it some monumental structure tht pours out this ficious blood thirsty warriors not ...and a wall of lightning appeared...

well thts about all i have to say jus wht i noticed off hand but solid story nice finish up good cliff hanging


commentCommented on: Sun Nov 20, 2005 @ 08:41pm
awesome~ but yeah ^^ use paragraphs xd

wow, it's your Gaia anniversary today? Happy Anniversary blaugh



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Sparda004
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commentCommented on: Fri Dec 09, 2005 @ 03:48am
problems fixed except paragraphs i hate them lol


commentCommented on: Fri Dec 09, 2005 @ 10:05pm
it took me an hour to read all 7 scenes....it's really good! keep up the good work! ^.^d



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Yuuka Kurokawa
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commentCommented on: Sat Dec 24, 2005 @ 10:30pm
*waits for next Scene*


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