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Things that affect my mood
wheather it be an error that frustrates me, a snoby person, a lucky find, if it happens i will write it down here.
O.M.G.!!!! Another Poem!!
Hey. I wrote another poem today!!. Check it out! I think it is pretty good. It sounds more like a song though when I say it.

Emotional Wreck

My life is a disaster,
its screwed up and scattered,
want to help myself,
but it doesn't even matter,
outcast by society,
hated by most,
don't even fit in with those that are close,

An emotional wreck,
panic attacks depression and suffering,
always on medication sedatives and therapy,
paranoid to the point of insanity,
mood-swings and i can't focus,
angry about something,
but can't remeber my motives,

Took a look at myself,
didn't know what I was seeing,
is it dead or alive,
or something decieving,
I looked so pathetic,
and you can tell the pain is embedded,
rock-bottom self esteem,
I'm barely with it let alone level headed,

Can't trust anyone,
not even myself,
I hate me and everyone else,
nothing to look forward to,
but being depressed,
sorry for wasting your time,
by telling you this.

Please comment!!!! I want to know what you think! The honest truth! How can one better themself if they don't know the true crtique?






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Greensleeved~Elf
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commentCommented on: Sat Apr 21, 2007 @ 02:11pm
It's sad. :[


commentCommented on: Mon Aug 06, 2007 @ 07:34am
it's really really good. i like the way you express your feelings in it. one thing i do sugest is to check your punctuation, i think there should be some periods instead of comas. smile



twinkled_monqui
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