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Prologue

"Aralee...Aralee..."

"Jon? Jon is that you?" I called in reply.

"Aralee, Aralee please! Please forgive me!"

"But Jon! What you did was terrible!" I shouted in anger.

"Please! Please just let me hold you one last time!"

"I can't Jonathan, I just can't trust you anymore!" I responded, tears now flowing.

"But I love you!"

***

I woke with a start. I looked over at my wall and into the mirror. Staring back at me, was a tall, slim, brown haired, blue eyed girl. Her eyes were gleaming with unshed tears. Around her neck was the necklace given to her by Jonathan.

Seeing the necklace, and remembering the dream, I began sobbing uncontrollably. I shoved my head into my pillow, muting the sound from the rest of the world.

Once the tears would no longer come, I removed my face from my soggy pillow. I looked over at my clock. In bright neon numbers it read: 5:36 am. Groaning I threw my soggy pillow to the floor and rolled over. Then, I drifted back to sleep.
***
"Aralee! Wake up! It's time for school!" My mother called from far away.

"Alright." I sighed. It had happened again, he had come to me in my dreams, and I'd been helpless. There was no where for me to turn anymore. I had cried myself out many times, and it never helped.

I crwaled out of bed and into the shower. I commenced with my normal daily routine; brush teeth, get dressed, brush hair. Then, I trudged down the stairs.

"'Morning Mom!" I called into the kitchen.

"Good morning honey. I made you breakfast." She smiled.

"Thanks!" I replied brightly, returning the smile.

My mom didn't look her age, she was almost 40, but she looked only as if she were in her mid-twenties, people often mistook us for siblings.

After my quick breakfast, I rushed out the door, over to my best friend Kayla's house.

"Ready for school?" She called as soon as I was in sight.

"Ready as I'll ever be!" I responded grinning.

We continued our walk to the bus stop, chatting randomly.

Kayla was quite the popular girl. No matter what she did, people naturally just flocked to her. She was really kind, and her light green eyes pulled people in. Her naturally thin and curvy body, made her the envy of most girls, and easy on the eyes for most boys. She had shoulder-length blond hair with her bangs hanging over one eye.

Even though Kayla and I had only met in our summer of eighth grade, we had become fast friends. We had instantly bonded, and since then, we had never been apart. We got into the occasional argument, but all we ever had to do was apologize, and we both realized how much we really needed each other. Just the simple apology was all we really needed to be best buds again.

"Hello? Earth to Aralee?" Kayla called pushing my arm.

"Oh, sorry, too deep in my thoughts huh?"

"As usual." She rolled her eyes. "You remember I have that concert after school right?"

"Yeah, I remember. I'll wait for you." I grinned.

"Alright, should I meet you in the usual spot?"

"Yep." I replied.

"Then I'll see you there!" She leaned over and gave me a quick hug, as the bus pulled up to school. Then she got off the bus, and was instantly surrounded by a mass of students.

So? Do you like the prologue? I never really liked the first chapter, so I had to add a new one! I think it starts it off better, and I hope you agree! Tell me what you think! heart






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frdee
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commentCommented on: Sun Dec 17, 2006 @ 09:39pm
Ya. I deffinatly like this new beginning. It gives a loyt more background info and a lot more descriptive. I can't really think of anything else to add besides WOW! The dream is so sad.... sad


commentCommented on: Sun Dec 17, 2006 @ 09:44pm
Lol. Yeah it is, but it's better because it draws the reader into the story more than the old first chapter did.



shadowwjlh
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frdee
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commentCommented on: Sun Dec 17, 2006 @ 09:54pm
True. And you know more about what you are getting yourself into by reading it. If that was the first chapter of a book I was reading I would be more interested then before because I know it's going to have a little of all of my favorite types of books.


commentCommented on: Tue Dec 19, 2006 @ 01:17am
I heart this one a lot more! You did a great job! 3nodding



yuki461k
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shadowwjlh
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commentCommented on: Tue Dec 19, 2006 @ 01:22am
Yay! Everyone likes it! I'm glad I did a better job! My writing is getting better the more I get into this story! So, I hope when I go back and rewrite/revise the other chapters that they'll get better!


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