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Remember Whenever you are lonely or want to get away remember I am here for you everyday, I will allways confort you when you are down and I will make sure that you never frown Whenever u think the whole world hates u just remember that I dont...its true, For i wouldnt hate you for anything even for lots of money and expensive things. So go off and do whatever you do, just remember that i remember you. ================= This is a short poam(i mean very short) i thought of in my head....untill my next poam this is Spicesayy saying buh-bye xp

Posted by: Spicesayy Sun Aug 10, 2008 @ 10:09pm

I'm not sure if forever and always exist anymore....but I'm sure I have an angel watching over me....

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Fou Femelle
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Commented on: Sun Aug 10, 2008 @ 10:28pm


	You're surprisingly good at poetry, y'know? The topic is simple, shows you're not trying to be overly deep and complicated like a lot of other poets I know. And you rhymed it well. Only thing is, I would write out all of "you" instead of just the letter, and capitalize the "I"s. That's pretty much it though. I like the last line of the second stanza a lot for some reason. =/ Okay I is done. :B