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HOPE
They stare a those shiny, wet things,
Running down my cheeks.
They don't try to help,
They don't look sympathetic,
They don't care.
Wait,
What's that?
There's a face,
A face that looks different,
He looks like he cares.
Could he?
Could he care?
No,
Maybe he's looking at someone else,
Thinking about someone else.
He probably doesn't know I exist.
- by vampiress911 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 09/28/2008 |
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- Title: Hope
- Artist: vampiress911
- Description: It's a depressing poem that I wrote a while back. Just so you people know, the boy isn't anyone imparticular. If people like it then I'll write more. Please comment and be has harsh as you need to be (but only if it'll help my writing).
- Date: 09/28/2008
- Tags: hope poem depressing
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Comments (6 Comments)
- l Sly As A Fox l - 09/29/2008
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wow very good
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- Toppyknot - 09/28/2008
- "shiny wet things" is not a good description. Like, srsly, that gave me the mental image of an innertube at first. Which is a fun, balloon-like, happy visual. Which is definitely not appropriate for your poem. Your poem which is not in the least bit depressing, because I can't sympathize because the words are empty and overused.
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- gorea takanashi - 09/28/2008
- make it rymhe then talk to me
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- sweetalibi - 09/28/2008
- nice
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- pinoyforever - 09/28/2008
- i like it
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- The White Lily - 09/28/2008
- Its kind of depressing your right but maybe it should be a little longer.
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