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On a warm summer day,in the kingdom of Detto,where the king was the strongest and most foolish person of all,there was a girl named Carmi.
Carmi is the daughter of the king,and she is a very nice girl.In her castle,she was asleep.
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Carmi Woke up.Her long red hair glowed in the morning sun.
"Good morning Mr.Pup."
*Woof!*
(As they say,Mans' Best friend a dog...But I don't agree with that.)
Suddenly McGon Came up.
"Miss Carmi,how may I be of assistance?"McGon asked politely.
"No need,McGon,I am hoping to fly someday..."
"Well,Miss Carmi,you could take the airplane."
"But I want more than just a simple airplane!I want to fly and feel the wind beating at my face!"Carmi yelled.
"Well,Miss,I wish you luck with that."
And McGon left the room.
(Personally,Carmi hates being called "Miss Carmi."She has been known as that for 15 years.So she decided to tell people to stop calling her that.)
"McGon,you can stop calling me 'Miss Carmi!'"
"Yes,Miss Carmi..."
Miss Carmi then got off her bed,put on a sweater and shorts,and said,
"Hey,Narrator!You can stop calling me 'Miss Carmi' too!"
Ever since then,I stopped.
"That's Better."
So she walked all the way to the kitchen,hoping there would be a stack of pancakes awating her.
(Pancakes are her favorite food,But she is underweight.She only weighs 75 pounds even though she is 17,meaning that her father was king when she was 2.)
"Ahh,Strawberry pancakes!My favorite!Thank you chef." The King said,"Good morning,Daughter!"
"Good morning,Father."She said dully.
"What is wrong,Carmi?"Asked The King.
"There's just so much to do in life,Father!I'm not sure if I have enough time in life to do everything I want to do."
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To be Continued,seeing as My computer keeps overwriting the text,sorry!
- by Fire2night |
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- | Submitted on 04/19/2009 |
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- Title: The Royal Life of a Traveler
- Artist: Fire2night
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Description:
Ahh...My first writing entry...
Let's see how it goes!
It has some things other authors use.
And Please rate fairly!
Don't just think *Man,this is so long,I'm just gonna give it 3 or 2 stars*
Please just skip it,without rating it at all,I'm trying and craving to be an Author in real life.
Whatever is in the Parentisies (<-these->) is what I have to say,Lemony Snicket uses this in his books,so I give him a lot of credit for this peace. - Date: 04/19/2009
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Comments (3 Comments)
- l Captivate l - 04/22/2009
- Its not bad, give more detail in your writing, other then saying for example "Miss Carmi then got off her bed" add detail. Movement. But not bad for a start. Keep writing ! : DD 3/5
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- Fire2night - 04/19/2009
- I'm trying too...Just...I thought it was good...
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- QWSterl - 04/19/2009
- read more, you can use phrases once in a while, and stop writing ONLY what happens! give us some details!
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