Afternoon at the ball part 1

• Artist: Heart13
• Description: XP critizize please. let loose.
• Date: 07/16/2008
• Tags: afternoon ball

"Dance madamoiselle?" Sure thing tall dark and ugly. You look like a mummy. "Yes I would love to dance." "You look lovely this evening." better than you ever will Imhotep. Watch the hands grabby. "Thank you" god i wish there were better looking people here than the Frankensteins creation. Where the hells Dracula? There he is!!! PLEASE END SOON I WANNA DANCE WITH HIM!!! "So have you danced with any other agreeable partners miss?" Pfft. NO. "Why, yes I have. Though none quite so light on their feet." I LIE!! PLEASE LET LIGHTNING STRIKE ME NOW!!! "Why thank you. I have never heard that before." BECAUSE ITS A LIE!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "Im shocked." Ack, you've stepped on my dress, i hope it didnt tear... I don't want to be in peaces by the time this evening is over....

Comments

[Grape-soda-whore]

Try some spacing via paragraphs.Every time someone talks it should be a new paragraph. The way it is now, it'salljumbledtogether, so it's hard to understand. Also, thoughts are supposed to be conveyed through italics. At least, that's the way I've always read them.
Other than that, interesting concept, good job. smile

[pop_it_like_its_hot1226]

first!!! well i like it