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I reach out to catch you,
To cradle your head in my arms,
But you slip right through my fingers,
And land among the stars.
I didn’t really realize, the time you began to drift.
Your spirit seeking comfort, whilst mine began to shift,
Unintentionally ignoring them, your subtle cries for help,
Well and truly focused only on myself.
Within your written letters, there you scribed your pain,
I didn’t pay attention until you lay gone,
Cold at the foot of a hill, mind and body slain.
You asked me one day, did I ever wish to be free?
To be honest, those words didn’t mean anything to me.
It was your spirt locked inside that now eternal cage of fully justified hurt,
That was begging for someone to help you turn a new leaf over.
Our chance to save you fled when your hands found that cursed rope,
On the wings of ignorance had fled your last shred of hope.
I should have paid attention; now all I can do is cry.
You left us all divided, as you watch on from the sky.
Faith will never truly know you, sadly nor will we.
Cling now to you well deserved peace, until maybe one day,
We will meet.
-Hannah Dearlove
- Title: For Nicole
- Artist: Stormgem
- Description: A poem I wrote for my friend's memorial this year. Been gone a whole year, love you Nicole, miss you muchly.
- Date: 06/19/2010
- Tags: nicole
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Comments (1 Comments)
- viper_353 - 11/22/2010
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:'( this one was so good....She's lucky have a friend like you. ♥
Since you asked for criticism....and I don't want to give it on this one b/c it's so amazing.....I'd just fix up a bit of the punctuation on the ends of lines. I know it's hard, (and I have trouble with this all of the time) but too many commas will break up the flow of the line....try taking out just as many as you can (off of the ends of lines!). It will sound better smile
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