ADOLESCENCE

• Artist: Arte Suave
• Description: Of a young woman I knew.
• Date: 04/01/2010
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She licks the ice cream,
pink champagne,
where it drips between her fingertips
like a clock that only ticks
in a pantomime of
summer's grace and trick.

With gloss on her lips
and the lace on her hips
like the blush on porcelain
not a child or a queen
and just this side of
in between.

But she's a woman
and a liar
she's a serpent in the briar
she's painted her sapphire eyes
in innocence, a glaze.
And everyone is terrified
someday she'll find the sex inside
her legs and in her head and on her heart.

For now, she licks the champagne
from her fingers at the park.

-SOULFUL COMMANDOE

Comments

[SilvertongueSagittarius]

Im diggin it, but it kinda drops off at the end. I'd like to see this extended. 4/5, and I'll be watching your work, young poet

[wearesmall]

This is beautiful. There need to be more writers like you. Tell me when you get your book published, because I know you will smile

[Echo Ligeia]

Very nice. Gives a subject matter - sexuality of young adults - that will startle and perhaps rattle people. I admire you for writing it.
The tempo is pleasant, the imagery is symbolic - I give it a 5/5.
Truly well done.