Illusion

• Artist: Moheli
• Description: This is one of the first good poems I've ever written. (= I thrive on CONSTRUCTIVE criticism.
• Date: 10/07/2009
• Tags: illusion

Illusion
by Moheli A.K. Renae

The laughter that lingers
In the snow fallen way
With its soothing warm voice
Implores you to stay

The cool breeze
And cold, white maze
Is forgotten more often
In the warmth of this haze

Its ethereal song
Can be heard by the fools
That are deprived of their leisures
Their persona, their jewels

The illusion that envelops
And cushions their fall
Will always be there
To cradle one and all

Comments

[emeraldpuppy9]

i like it :]
However, i suggest you change the line "is forgotten more often" it sounds a bit awk/too simplistic even?
love most of your word choice :]
keep it up biggrin