Gone By Morning

• Artist: F a t a l D e c o d e
• Description: This is a poem I wrote while it was raining. There's a little statue at the bottom of my garden, so it looked like someone was sitting in the rain.
  
  The poem is about a girl who will die before the morning...how you think she dies is up to you. One of my friends said he thought it was suicide, and my sister thought she was ill.
  
  I hope you like it. Please comment so I can know what you think!
• Date: 09/03/2009
• Tags: tears morning rain death dark

She sits under the stars,
Moon as her companion.
Sky unfolding,
Night in all its glory.

Illuminated by lightening,
That flickers like a heart.
Distorting the truth,
Now unrecognizable.

Shrouded in blessed silence,
She welcomes the darkness.
Kissed by the rain,
It hides her tears.

Drops of crystalline beauty;
They fall from her eyes.
They fall from the sky,
True synchronicity.

She is one with the night,
Comforted by its embrace.
Both will fade,
With morning's light.

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Comments

[UC Poika]

Interesting and wonderful fhyme. Love the pattern Bigmouth must have missed.

[Sadist Panda]

I think the second stanza was well thought out...The idea of distorted truth really struck a nerve with me. Overall, nice work!

[I Like to Eat Faces]

mmm i just have a really strange imagination

[BigMouth12349]

It was really good, although it coud have flowed a little better. Just because its free verse doesn't mean it doesn't have to have some pattern. Like the number of sylables or something. 4/5. Oh, and if you could leave a comment on my story "Circle you, circle you" I would really appriciate it, because I would really like to know how to make it better. (sorry for the huge comment)

[F a t a l D e c o d e]

That's an interesting idea, I hadn't thought of that! Thanks for commenting~

[I Like to Eat Faces]

hmm.. she will soon give up her life for her lover. He was kidnapped and the only way to save him was to make a trade.. His life for her's.