Broken Dreams

• Artist: Aerial Frog
• Description: Just another poem. Hope you like it <3
• Date: 07/10/2009
• Tags: broken dreams

Something she can’t handle
What you say to her, she takes to heart
She could be burning bright, like your candle
But instead, you choose to part

Do you know what you did to her?
She doesn’t show her emotion
All she does is go home, cry, and listen to her cat purr
It’s like a curse, like a potion

Sometimes she says she is done
Take a walk in her shoes
Was it fun?
She feels like she wants to blow a fuse

Why did you have to part?
You ripped out her heart

Comments

[fruit4you]

Sycoskater, it is not a sonnet, it looks a little bit like a sonnet, but it isn't. And to Aerial Frog. The rhyme scheme is great, although the poem lacks flow and rhythm. If you were going for a sonnet, make sure each line is exactly 10 syllables. You have a very good and defined tone.

[II-RedVelvet_Jokett-II]

i love this!!!

[sycoskater]

im loving the way u put this sonnet together its so good yet sad at the same time