MY bestest poem yet

• Artist: GK201_AML
• Description: Hope all of u like my poetry
• Date: 04/19/2009
• Tags: bestest poem

"The colors of her mind
Bleed into each other
As the mourning melts the night
And the stars enchant each other
While her eyes are still held shut
She can hear you breathing softly
Your words echo in her mind
And your words are clear
and she knows that you are here

Yes
I see her laughing at the rains that hits her face
With her arms stretched open soaking in the love
In a world she found so hard she finds so beautiful
There's a hope in her deep inside from you"

Comments

[sxyfunsize]

It was ok. I liked that you made everything ryme. However, it didn't make alot of sense. You went from having the girl sleeping and then her standing in the rain.

[SirynECrow]

This left me wondering if you were ten years old. I didn't like it at all, and if you want to be taken seriously try using /real/ words instead of "bestest." 0/5