heart break

• Artist: slim shady gangsta NY
• Description: yo, this about this girl who treated me horrible man, and 4 u guys who will ever feel like this, these r my feelins in a good way
• Date: 03/16/2009
• Tags: heart break

ii sold my heart 2 the devil,she took it broke it and gave it back talk about female attack , she was colder than the north pole like a stripper pole, she took my heart and swallowed it whole, she takes off in the night 2 find her prey, mess up another mans day, so lord i pray,help me heal these wounds , my hearts dead in a tomb, its in a million peices, and i pray 2 u jesus,i thought she would give u pitty, but she didnt she made my life all shitty ,2 sad 2 be angry, thinkin bout the hurt she made me,dont even call her baby,i shoulda took the depression session bok, cant eat drink or sleep,i wanna weap,u see the foggy moonlight,in the night,its her ready 2 fight,i prayed 2 you, 2 fade the red and leave the blue.

Comments

[P00R L3N0]

those man eaters. haha.
i liked it, but with a few spacing and a bit of punctuation, this thing would be happening.
I like the word usage. helped it come alive to me

[White_Snow_Princess09]

uh, not bad , and my feeling was reading your story was not fine at all

[Doctor Jax]

Hmm, not bad, not bad. Touch it up with a bit with better punctuation, a little bit of spacing so it's easier to read and this thing's the bomb!

[slim shady gangsta NY]

not like that but in a way yea cuz of the way she treated me

[Xx_BunnyAlice_xX]

Ur calling this girl the devil...?