Love without Gravity

• Artist: Apocalyptic Beatdown
• Description: Read it. Enjoy it.
• Date: 01/19/2009
• Tags: love without gravity

She can make tears of joy
leak from the universe
and dare not blink
all focus on her
eyes like thunderclouds
voice to be heard
her presence like
a present
that I don't deserve
Engulf me in her flame
and burn me slow
so I can bask in her beauty
while she burns my soul
I ponder her essence
what could be the purpose
that ever on this earth
should exist such a person
sometimes I have to touch her
to be sure that she's here
never blink twice
for fear she might disappear
never think twice about
giving her my all
if she'd ask for my sperm
I'd give her both my balls
if she asked me for my love
I'd give my heart, mind, and soul
rain from her thunderclouds
my blood on her clothes.

Comments

[Tinariwen]

Meh. Its not even close to some of the awful things that pass for writing on this site, most of them hideously cliche. Don't worry so much.
Not to be egotistical or anything, but if you are looking for an unusual poem, try reading mine. Its in my gallery. Only thing I ever bothered to submit, and no one cared. Ah well, so is life. :3

[MeIanite]

That part towards the end caught me off gaurd, other than that good poem and not cliche at all. xd

[RisexWithxthexDead]

Good biggrin and this was posted on my birthday

[Apocalyptic Beatdown]

you know something...I'd have to agree after rereading this that it does feel kinda cliche. sorry. check my other works for some more out of the box works.

[Fo-eights Beach Fo-eights]

Engulf me in her flame
and burn me slow
so I can bask in her beauty
while she burns my soul

That was the only part I really liked, but it was still quite cliche.
You have potential though. =)

[Starlight_Miss]

Except for a few sexual parts, it's a really awesome poem! Rate back please?