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i walk through the dark mist thinking to myself " where am i? what am i doing here?" i had no idea where i was. i wanted to yell help but i new no one was going to hear me because i ran away from my home and my village. i can't go back, even if i wanted to, no one wants me there anymore. no one cares for me there. i thought if i ran away and found a new village i could start a new beginning for myself but now, im lost, i cant find my way out. i try to find food and shelter but all i can find is the ground and the foggy cold mist. i thought i could've survive by myself and travel alone. i new i had to take someone with me but i didnt listen to myself, i thought wrong.
days pass by and im dying from hunger and lonleyness. i said to myself " i dont wanna die alone.. " i new i was going to die alone in the dark. i new it from the beginning, ever since i was born. when i was born, my mother died and my father was crying. when i got to kindregarden i asked my dad a question " wheres mommY?" he answered "shes up there now watching over us" i ask again " what happened to her" he got angry at me and started to cry like he did when she died. "she died because of you! i hate you! i never wanted you! i hated you ever since you were born and after she died!" he yelled crying at me. i look down at my feet and started to cry too. i ran outside. and thats how i got here. now im alone.
a week passes by and im dead.
someone out hunting found me but he was to late to save me. he buried me. but before that he found a tear sliding down from my cheek. he said "rest in peace!" he buried me.
the tomestone said "little girl died in the forest from hunger and lonleyness."
- by Divine_Blossom |
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- | Submitted on 12/23/2008 |
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- Title: little girl found dead
- Artist: Divine_Blossom
- Description: this girl died of hunger and lonleyness. she was a lonley girl who ran away from her home and her village. she thought she could find another village so she could start a new beginning for herself
- Date: 12/23/2008
- Tags: little girl found dead
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Comments (7 Comments)
- FreeHugsFunWorld - 08/09/2009
- Thash so scary. xO
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- Trekkie_11111 - 06/29/2009
- You should think about having your writing edited before you post it anywhere. No one with a good sense of writing will be able to fairly rate this because the grammar and spelling is atrocious. If you take a little time and get someone to go over this, people will be able to tell you how good your writing actually is. 2/5 for the attempt...
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- METRO SKiiES - 06/07/2009
- Seriously, its not that hard to be literate. I agree with every person who has said this isn't a good piece. You should note that all the people who say they're rating this five stars can't spell and don't have very valid reasons to like this other than "OMG SO SAD!!!! i luv it! 5/5!" This isn't poetry. It's a lame attempt at a short story. It's cliche, impossible to understand, and unrealistic. What kind of child "knows" they are going to die alone in the cold and dark? This disgraces writing.
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- DoubleMintTwins18 - 06/06/2009
- sad...T.T 4/5 ~xox~ please comment my poems. Thanks a ton!!
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- kittyluver818 - 06/03/2009
- that was kind of too sad
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- Jokiel Dark Skull - 05/29/2009
- osome 5/5
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- Your Account Helper 032 - 05/25/2009
- i like it 4/5 but cause of your grammer keep up the good work!!
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