love with all the little peice

• Artist: doodlejuju
• Description: Something i wrote during school
  hope you like it
• Date: 12/17/2008
• Tags: love with little peice

Recently i've loved standing out in the rain,
so no one can see my cry,
as the tears run down my face,
i think of a lulloby,
but it grants me no happiness,
only sadness to come,
for you've stabed my heart,
and steped on the love.
But no matter how many time you crush my dreams,
I seem to always love you with all the little peices,
shattered and broken,
they begin comeing back,
into a whole,
hoping that you and me,
can live happily in matramony.

Comments

[FireD3mon]

kewl

[Angelically_Evil]

i luv it

[Unfound Dreams]

I like it but I think that maybe you could adjustt the title really, to corporate with the poem. The poem is good, I just think the title could use alittle work. I'm just being a critic. I'm not trying to be mean, just trying to help with what I think would make the poem better.