Soulless once again

• Artist: DarkOfTheMoon
• Description: its hard to explain.. its another that you'll have to try and figure out..
• Date: 12/11/2008
• Tags: soulless once again

Days come, and days go. The sun sets, and the sun rises. time flies and time slows. But once again the soul comes to an end. An everlasting end. Neither should love be embraced, or erased. Endure till the end, and thereafter. The heart will live again. A rose burns, slow and steadily, just as it grows from seed to flower. The moon sets, and the moon flies. Rotating around these godforsaken lies. No longer will i be, plain and simple me. for my heart is frozen in time, and i am soulless once again. Your love is what i'll feel, somewhere in my frozen heart. Slow and hardened. Will it be revived? from what i see, it won't be by me. toss the paper into the eternal fire, watch the writing burn from the distasteful flames. Embrace the cold and soulless life, Erase the emotions from the never ending cold. For I am Soulless once again..

Comments

[DarkOfTheMoon]

Thank you for that advice.. But most of my writing i use as either songs, or just a way to vent. Other than that i'm not much of a writer. but i Very appreciate your comment and advice ^.^

[conceptually_concrete]

It's obvious that you have the potential to be a brilliant writer, but you don't have the basics down. This has absolutely no structure, the use of punctuation throws it off, and I was immediately distracted by a misspelled word. Every writer begins with the raw beauty of words, but the factor that distinguishes one as great is the ability to craft that beauty into something marvelous, which requires some structure, be it ordinary or abstract. Master the mechanics and you will be great.