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Red for those who've died
Blue for those who've cried
White for beyond the golden gate
And all this caused by hate
Waving high above my head
I think of all those dead
But at least I know, for me
Freedom isn't free
- by Kain_Kyuubi |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 09/22/2008 |
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- Title: What It Cost
- Artist: Kain_Kyuubi
- Description: for all those americans out there
- Date: 09/22/2008
- Tags: cost
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Xxhells bloodxX - 06/06/2009
- ermmmmm ish ok but if the rhyme messes up the poem dont go with rhyming (poems dont have to rhyme)
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- Xankeno - 09/22/2008
- Poems dont always have to rhyme or even be rhythmic. Poetry is all about feeling and trying to show your own feelings through words and i think he has done a good job of it, not great, but good.
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- Hiraetha - 09/22/2008
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5, 5, 8, 6, 7, 6, 7, 5
Is there any rhyme or reason to your syllables?
Get some rhythm, and then call it a poem, until then, its words arranged to look like a poem. It's a good theme, very patriotic and dramatic, but it lacks any form of rhythm. - Report As Spam
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