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Life is a daily battle and one we all must face,
For some can rise above it all,
While others fall from grace.
We start the struggle early and learn
along the way,
That for every path to glory,
There is another that leads away.
Each day that passes brings us close
to that one final call,
For the choices that we make each day
determine where we fall.
To walk and straight and narrow path and
choose what's only right,
Can keep us safe, secure and loved
by Heaven's adorning light.
But to error is human and human is
what we are,
And for that meek and simple fact
we won't get very far.
But now the end is drawing near and
our judgment call is made.
For those who've walked on Heaven's path
and for those who always strayed.
For Hell is open to everyone
with a large and smiling face ...
But Heaven is only open ....
to the One's Who've Aced The Race.
- by Angel of Forgotten Souls |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/27/2008 |
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- Title: Acing the Race
- Artist: Angel of Forgotten Souls
- Description: Just a poem that I entered in a Guild Contest - Theme was Heaven and Hell ..
- Date: 07/27/2008
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Shuro-kun - 08/04/2008
- I like it, Heaven. I hope you can win. smile Life is always a battle, especially in the real world. :/
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- Kid0blivion - 08/02/2008
- that was so cool! i loved it!
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- jess=^_^=chi - 07/28/2008
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*continued*
"but to error is human"
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"for the choices that we make each day determing where we fall."
A very interesting poem. I like it quite a bit. Keep it up. ^^ 4/5 - Report As Spam
- jess=^_^=chi - 07/28/2008
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Yeah, I like the how you incorperated the them as well. When I enter something I usually like comments that will help me to improve and so that is the type of comment I will attempt to leave. If you don't like them then sawries, you can stop reading now because the last thing I want to do is offend you.
I;m not sure why the first stanza only has 3 lines. Maybe it's beyond me but it bugs me a bit in an OCD way. razz
I enjoyed reading your poem. I really liked these lines in particular:
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- StartingOver43 - 07/28/2008
- Nanna luvs you hunny bunny! Big 5 from me!
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- Eizoryu - 07/27/2008
- Sweet poem. :3 I can't write poetry, but I can sure respect those who can. I really like how you incorporated the theme you were working with. It's kinda inspirational. ^^
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- TheLastToStand - 07/27/2008
- You got it girl - 5 stars from me!
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