Duality

• Artist: Hirestel
• Description: This is a revision of a piece I wrote in my Creative Writing class last semester. The concept was simply to write about anything that had the ability to be two things at once. This was just a random revision of the original piece I wrote.
• Date: 07/17/2008
• Tags: life

I am the epitome of duality.
For I can be everything that you need
And can be nothing that you'd want.
I am the maelstrom forcing you to me.
And the gentle waves playing at your ankles.
I challenge your logical arguments
Then acquiesce to your ludicrous demands.
I am the lion removing your head savagely.
And the domesticated kitten snuggling to you.
I am the strongest you will ever engage.
But my weaknesses will be your downfall.

And you either hate me
For that which I stand for
Or you love me
For that which I am.
Your opinion may change.
But it can never be both.
Because I am the epitome of duality.

Comments

[Lord_Aubrey_Shade]

Great poem, wonderful language. Suggestions: avoid unnecessary words such as: "and", "for", "but", and sometimes even "you". The first stanza is definitely stronger than the last, and the repetition of the last stanza actually takes away a little from the great beginning. Either edit it or omit the last stanza. Brilliant work.
Also... a line break has the same effect as a period, so periods actually add EXTRA emphasis and are often unnecessary, as well.