Push Pin

• Artist: cpoggie
• Description: A cute little poem I had to write in school about a random object. I chose a red pushpin.
• Date: 07/15/2008
• Tags: pushpin

A blob of red on a white landscape,
Hiding a minature knife, thin and
Sharp, like a drop of blood.

Comments

[Cottoncandyocbra3]

Hm, I feel the poem would be stronger, if you used a metaphor, instead of a simile. A little desolate, but fair, nonetheless. 1.75/5.