death by school

• Artist: Kishin_Mistress
• Description: this is about a girl who hates school so muchsshe sees things
• Date: 12/29/2008
• Tags: poetry insanity

a girl named onix tadikichi sits down at the kitchen,her life passes before her eyes as she inhaled the darkness,the walls closed in on her as she rushed to the stairs to her room,the stairs seemed to be going further every time she took a step! she crashes into the couch as she gets dizzy,and she asks herself "why me?" as her mom tells her shes going to school this year....

Comments

[TheIndigoRose]

Uhm...it's not bad, but it's not good either. I give it a...6/10

[katoraSun456]

wht but if your expressing yourself ummm good job but please more on the paper or it can be less with more meaning but good with expressing

[-x- Fridge -x-]

Uh, wow. Work on format okay? That wasn't really a poem. Maybe you should post in the "Fiction" writing section. :[

[Kishin_Mistress]

well even if i did mess up i thank you all for voting!

[XxBLOOD_JAYxX]

i think u messed up the description and the poem.

[Xxxcarashka_mischkaxxX]

,,well,, i think my classmate will refer to this one!