fallin angel

• Artist: deathdragon009-alucard
• Description: dark
• Date: 09/12/2008
• Tags: fallin angel

Slowly I breathe looking at the ceiling i sleep olny a short time . i think alot my brain never shuts down as i run RPGs in my head. I almost never truly sleep. So i lay here. I live in darkness, like a vampire scared of the light Loneliness is my life every one can't see it . No one really cares if i'm in pain. They see only a part of me . I'm a falling angel, with no path accept the path I make. For I am the angel of Death.

Comments

[ZachClark]

This is filled with grammatc errors and need to be extremely reevised.

[Crystal Blue Iris]

The words seem great but I just don't feel with it.. I like the last couple sentances but... The rest i just was lost..

[eina540]

i write and that was truly ahmazing... you should enter a poetry slam if you know what one is... i am tomorrow

[Xxgood_angel_gone_badxX]

i agree it was great

[LOL Chubby Rainbow LOL]

Every one seems to be giving you nothing but kudos, so I suppose I am the one who has to knock you down a notch. I am not doing this to be mean I believe that all artists must be put down so they see their errors and improve their work and obtain perfection.

First of all I love free-verse that's not the issue it is the issue is there is no flow what-so-ever. If you are going to write free-verse poetry you have to have some flow you know.

[Lucar Degis]

very beautyful you have alot of talent

[walbertotheman]

truely amazing