bloody night

• Artist: egiptionhottie111
• Description: blood
• Date: 08/27/2008
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bloody night

it was a long time ago not i was just walking doin my thing when i heard a gun shot i started to run as i heard more and more shots all i saw was blood blood and more blood then i heard i few more gun shots and then i had a shock of pearicin pain i was shot at a few times then i started to bleed bleed and bleed and i realized im 15 and im gonna die!! s**t!!!!!!!!!! i felt weeker and weeker and then splat all my blood was drained out.. gone!!!!

next thing i new i found my self pased out and i was dreanched when i went to see wat it was it was blood not just any blood my blood and my arms and legs were hurting me like like hell was it real am i dead am i dreaming i will never know will u??

Comments

[TikTokTikTok]

Take some classes before you totally destroy what is known as Gaia.

[transient cowgirl]

No offense, but I 100% agree with them, your grammar, and your spelling suck. I am ridiculous when it comes to spelling, you need to take a class or something. It really bugs me when there are errors in spelling. 0/5

[serenitys memory]

Did you really get shot? Oh well, anyway you really need to edit this and fix the grammar because I'm a grammar freak and apparently I'm not the only one.

[iHushabye]

~You need a spell check, I don't know if the bad words were necessary ._., I don't really like the ending too much. Good plot though. 1/5

[xX-o-bby_xX]

You need a spell check. Also you put like 5 ands in a sentence and that is inproper

[Sky_kisser15]

spell check

[Kittilord]

Its like you have tourette's or something. I feel sorry for you, but not because you got shot, because you are retarded.