Love Fades Away...

• Artist: ii_jonny_3_tears
• Description: I wrote this, don't know if its any good or not..this is my first one so dont try to rate harshly..
  
• Date: 11/30/2008
• Tags: love fades away

Here i lay, in my blood..


no one to help me..
wishing someone here to cure me..


dreaming, of how my life could of been if this didnt happen..
i close my eyes and wish this never happen..


then all of a sudden i hear voices..
i hear words like "is he alive?, is he breathing?'"


i wake up in the hospital..
hooked up to life support..
my girlfriend on the side of the bed holding my hand
and crying.."please don't die..you just cant die..
"im not gonna die" i said "because I love yo-....."
silence....
doctors come in and try to bring me back to life..
"were sorry ma'am..hes dead...."
girlfriend cries...


then 3 weeks later..found dead..she hung her self...
now there in heaven together, forever...

Comments

[XxErotic_LeprosyxX]

I like it. Couldve been a little more descriptive, maybe a bit more "choppy" maybe. It was good but you could use a bit more practice.

[tonstaar]

mmm,
next time work harder.
but this is okay.
3/4

[Dainty LadyArt]

Wow, this is emo >.< Still good though.

[Roan Sama]

Your Poem Is Kind Of Sad... But I Like It