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bzz...bzz...me...tod...av...th...an...t...al...f...r...pro...th...is...th...er...ve...ee...oo...o...ll...hi...ti...Bzzz.....
Silence, all I remember after all of that, was dead silence. I tired opening my eyes, and found the darkness clinging onto them like a shadow. My hands fumbled around for something to grab onto. While in the process of doing that, I managed to put feeling into my legs and start walking. Now, my eyes had gotten used to the dark, and my ears had functioned a bit more as my breath turned heavier and heavier. But in the blackest light, I still couldn't see anything minus my hands in front of my face. It took me a while to position myself against a wall, but after I did, I started taking my pace forward into this unknown place. About 20 steps later, my feet slipped from under me and I fell on some kind of liquid that was warm and thick, but the strange substance gathered all over my clothing and crawled up my skin. I tried crawling around in the strange fluid and I somehow ended up crashing into a table or something. Something dropped from it and ended up hitting me in the shin, causing my leg to burn with pain. I grabbed at the object and examined it with my only two senses that could withstand in the silence. I put the item up close to my face and finally found out that it was a lighter! I sat there and started flickering the flame on and off trying to get some light into the room and after a dozen tries, the thing finally lit. I put a smile to my face as I saw the light appear before my eyes and u flashed the light around the room. But my discovery, answered all of my unanswered questions. For instance, it told me what I was sitting in, why the fluid was so warm and creamy, and why I felt the urge to scream. In the corner of the room, laid a man, and on the floor, lied his blood...
- by wrym the anarchist |
- Non Fiction
- | Submitted on 10/09/2008 |
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- Title: Let it all go (intro)
- Artist: wrym the anarchist
- Description: Im writing a short story for my sci-fi class and i was writing the beginning of my story in my college class, but i just wanted to see what everybody else thinks about it.
- Date: 10/09/2008
- Tags: letitallgo
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Comments (7 Comments)
- wrym the anarchist - 11/28/2008
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Well, to really correct somethings, yes this is supposed to be under fiction, my mistake. Second, this is the rough draft of the actual version, I wrote this down when i got home from my college class so there are a few spelling and grammar mistakes. Third, I'm not in college, I'm still in high-school. I'm just taking a college class to waste time really.
But thanks for the comment Remy. - Report As Spam
- Remy Lafayette - 11/28/2008
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You know what the definition of "non-fiction" is right?
Something that's real.
A short story is usually fiction, and from the way you wrote it, it seems like fiction.
Work on your grammar and spelling more. Writers don't use "u" for "you".
You say you're in college? That's pathetic.
Seriously do it right, or don't write at all. - Report As Spam
- -l- Chad Dia -l- - 11/28/2008
- Could you type the rest PLEASE!?
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- Xxsexii gangstaxX - 11/27/2008
- wow i love it that was the greatst thing i ever heard
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- RL FOCUS - 11/27/2008
- Great details in the story. I could imagine everything clearly. Love to read the whole story!?!?!
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- Sea of Apparitions - 11/27/2008
- is there more to it?? I LOVE THESE TYPE OF STORIES!!!
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- Robotic Dream Weaver - 10/09/2008
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I liked it! *suspenseful* lol
Good job! - Report As Spam