A Shadow of Gold, Chapter Nine

• Artist: Kcayryn
• Description: This is a chapter from the novel I'm trying to write... I don't know, I'm kind of getting discouraged. I only have 104 pages, and I've been trying to write it for at least five years... Give me some feedback, here? I want honest opinions, please. If it's not your piece of cheesecake, fine, but be honest, okay? I particularly like this chapter, I think it's some of my best writing, so... I want to know if you think I should give up, or keep going.
• Date: 07/17/2009
• Tags: shadow gold chapter nine

CHAPTER NINE

Brilliant green eyes opened in confusion. This was not where he had gone to sleep! Where had the trees gone?!

The owner of the eyes sat up, and looked around. The eyes narrowed.

"They chopped up my tree and made buildings out of it!" A low growl followed this explination. How dare they! They shouldn't have touched my tree.

A window opened nearby, and the eyes snapped in the direction of it. Why was someone climbing in the window? How dare they defile the sacred tree?!

The owner of the brilliant green eyes moved from where they lay, hiding. They wouldn't get away with this.

When the window was clear, they eyes' owner darted for it, and then leaped out. For a sickening moment, the ground lurched near. But then it was gone.

Ah... to fly once more...

Comments

[WaterXElementXChick]

even tho there are a few typos its still very well done^^cant wait to read more^-^

[Kisade]

It's good aside from a few typos, if I had the other chapters I might be able to give more insight....