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One day there was these 2 brothers that went to the bluffs but 1 brother told his dad that he will not go anywhere exept the park.But he didnt obey that!So when they were going to the bluffs his other brother told him that there is a vermillin river of there!they went on the river.The other btother (joel) siad that they will race and dares his other brother (tony) to race to the sandbar.They did so joel was a good swimmer but tony wasnt so they still raced joel didnt knew that tony didnt knew how to swim!They started to race alltheway to the sandbar!Joel did the breaststroke and joel didnt knew his brother was drowning!Then joel reached firt thatn tony at the sandbar!When joel standed up tony wasnt there!He thought that tony was just hiding in a bush laughing!Tony didnt did that,so joel was really scared!Then he knew that tony is drowining and dead by now!He didnt want to report it to the piloce!he was finding tony.What is he going to tell his mom and dad and his family?If u want to continue ill telll you but just comment me and ask me!
- by Pinoy_Levi |
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- | Submitted on 03/30/2009 |
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- Title: The halloween day!>SCARY<
- Artist: Pinoy_Levi
- Description: Do not read this! nah you can read it!
- Date: 03/30/2009
- Tags: halloween dayscary
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Comments (7 Comments)
- xXco0l_breeZeXx - 05/10/2009
- you could work on your grammer, for example when it says, "Tony didnt did that." I think you mean "Tony didn't do that." Also it is kind of hard to follow. (I don't mean to be mean or rude but it takes a lot more to scare me.)
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- Pinoy_Levi - 04/04/2009
- It was in a grass the bush!
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- overthecheesebow - 04/02/2009
- it kinda hard to follow...i mean i get that tony drowned but uh why is there a bush when their already in the water???
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- Pinay_someone - 04/01/2009
- That was scary
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- Reported Actions - 03/30/2009
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OMG!!!
it is so SCARYYYY!
READ IT!
I DARE YOU TO!!!
WUHAHAHAHAHAH! - Report As Spam
- xTriXTeR - 03/30/2009
- i read this and it was scary!
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- Pinoy_Levi - 03/30/2009
- this is my scary story!
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