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Once upon a time there was a girl name aby she has red hair,glasses,12 years old and she has 12 dogs.When she went to the park with hor dogs her mom yelled and said "aby did you wear your clean underwears"aby was embarassed redface .Then when aby was walking around her dogs went crazy arf bark ruff the first dog ran around aby 20 times aby sighed. But when she went to the bank all her dogs was standing still like a soilder and aby said "lets all go home now"they were walking but the dogs were marching march march march.When they got home the dogs were hungery so aby gave some dog food to all of her dogs. and aby was happy.
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- by cutiepaws2 |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 01/19/2009 |
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- Title: the dog park
- Artist: cutiepaws2
- Description: hello lol
- Date: 01/19/2009
- Tags: park
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Hawaiigirl234234 - 01/22/2009
- It's kind of...odd sweatdrop If you add more detail perhaps, but the setting keeps jumping from one thing to the next so it's a little confusing. Also, I have no image of what you are writing... Is Aby black, white, blond, burnett, red head? Your story is just confusing so add more detail and use proper grammar! ^^
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- cutiepaws2 - 01/19/2009
- do any one like my writing its kind of short though
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