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The City of the Blind
There were 2 cities. One was called E and the other was called W. People in E were poor and were dying. This loss of so many lives was caused by Ed the alien. Ed wore old, torn up clothes and look like a human. Ed used viruses on the citizens of E. Ed also had a vaccine that could heal people who had the virus. People in W were fine and wealthy. They didn't care about E. They were being very mean and didn't let them use there medicine.
One day, the citizens of W had a big party. A lot of people were enjoying the party. There was a big meal and lots of dancing. People from E wanted to get into W and into the party. The people at the entrance to W didn't allow them to come in. A big group of people from E tried shoving there way through but the W army came. They kill some E citizens and the other people from E got scared and ran away. Many citizens of E are giving up on life. They knew the virus would eventually get to them so they kill themselves so they didn't have to suffer.
As the party began to end, Ed the alien tried to get into W. Because Ed looked just like a human, The people guarding the entrance to W thought Ed was from E. They got the W army to come and they captured Ed. Once they captured him they said they said they would experiment on him. When they turned there backs, Ed ran away. The army chased after him. Ed used his virus on them. The army not knowing they had the virus, gave up and went back into W. The virus spread through out W. Now people in E and W were dying.
Some surviving scientists in W were studying the virus. They came up with a way kill
the virus in people. They used the cure only on some of the people in W and not in E. It seemed to work so they used it on more and more people. Eventually most of the people in W were cured. When the virus problem seemed almost over for W, but everyone somehow got the virus again. The scientists thought it was from the people they didn’t cure. They went to cure everyone this time. When they used the cure on some people it didn’t seem to do anything. The scientists tried studying the virus again. They found out that the virus had evolved and now was able to protect itself from the cure they had made. The virus was now more dangerous then they could have ever imagined. They knew that the virus was the end for them.
Back in E, most of the people in the city were dead. Ed the alien had just arrived and saw that his virus was killing so many people. The citizens of E, being as nice as they were begged for Ed to use his cure on him. They offered Ed a home in the city. Ed was used to W being mean to him so he didn’t understand why the citizens of E were being so nice to him. He thought they were trying to capture him. He realized that they just wanted to be cured. Ed cured them all and in exchange got a home in E.
Some of the people in E wanted to see if they were allowed into W. When they got to the entrance there was nobody there. The people from E were confused but just went in anyway. When they got inside they didn’t see anyone. They continued through the city and suddenly heard moaning. They looked and saw someone on the ground not looking so good. They heard the person say to turn back because it is too dangerous to be in this city. The person started squirming. He yelled to run away. The people from e started to leave when little blue and red ant sized thing started coming out of him. The people from E started screaming and running away. The blue and red things started colliding and getting bigger. They formed a large spider like creature. It attacked some of the people from E. When it was hitting them people got sucked into its jelly like body. The army, having been cured from before and not getting the new virus came. They were shooting at the creature but it wasn’t help at all. Every shot was making it bigger. It was absorbing the energy of the bullets. The creature just kept absorbing the bullets and the people from E.
Ed the alien came to see what was happening and saw the huge creature. Ed told the army that was the virus he put into people. The army got mad at Ed for causing this but they had a much bigger problem at that moment. Ed tried using his cure on the virus but it did absolutely nothing. They continued shooting at it hoping to find a weak spot but they didn’t. They just made it bigger.
Ed suddenly got an amazing idea. He explained to a solider in the army that the creature uses the energy from the bullets to get bigger. Ed told the solider that using energy should do the opposite. The solider told the army to stop shooting at it and focus on dodging it hits. The army stop and waited. The creature swung one of its arms at some of the soldiers. The soldiers moved and watched as the creature shrunk. The soldiers kept dodging it attacks until it became the size of a normal spider. Ed captured it in a jar and gave it to one of the soldiers. The soldier walked away with the rest of the army.
After a few months there was a ceremony for the departure of Ed the alien. E and W were now one city. Ed said good bye and took of in his ship. Even today, at night Ed passes by Earth. Ed can hear you when you wish upon a star. His wish, is for this event to never happen again.
- by dark-link-pwned-you |
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- | Submitted on 11/16/2008 |
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- Title: The City of the Blind
- Artist: dark-link-pwned-you
- Description: About 2 cities. One city is poor. The other is rich. The rich city is "Blind" to any problems and doesn't care about anyone but its citizens.
- Date: 11/16/2008
- Tags: city blind shotystory
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Erios Nocturne - 01/23/2009
- I think it's very good as a fable. If it is a fable simplify it. If you want it to be a short story add more detail. As far as the story went, I think it was a very good lesson and idea.
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- -Stadium-Arcadium- - 11/24/2008
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Wow.
It lacks detail. A LOT of detail.
Try putting some more emotion into it. I just wasn't feeling it at all. And I usually LOVE sci-fi. - Report As Spam
- dark-link-pwned-you - 11/17/2008
- The most amzing story ever! I love it! Awsome! Incredible! Wow! I give it 5 stars! This is the best
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- StrawberryMangoIceCream - 11/17/2008
- ummm...o.k....but only 2 and 3/4 of a star.
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