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there was a couple how lived on 2 different planets how played the same online game
it was called gaia
there names were kayseen and creenta
they had no idea what they looked like but they loved each other
1 day things went terribly wrong
on a friday keyseen was having a bad luck day
he was home alone for 3 hours
in that time his online wife creenta was mad at him becuz she thought keyseen was frends with her swarn enimie (but he wasnt)
no matter what keyseen said she wouldnt believe him
she thought kayseen was ganna kill her but still no mater what he said she wouldnt listen
kayseen tried and tried but nothing worked and creenta left him
kayseen couldnt stop cryin he was broken hearted
he pleeded creenta to come bac but she didnt
kayseen asked for help cuz he didnt want to lose her
but the advise didnt work
creenta had a new bf and kayseen couldnt believe it
he kept cryin and crin cuz of the sadness
he tried his best to get her bac but she yelled at him
kayseen asked 1 of creenta's frend jensi
but it was no good
kayseen asked of his frends for advise
and his frends presan said "dont let yer dream to b with her die. u will get her bac i no it"
creenta loged out
kayseen was cryin and couldnt stop
kayseen and presan talked about it and presan said "lets talk about it tomorrow"
kayseen cryied him self to sleep
then it was the next day...
kayseen woke up and was on the computer
he talked with creenta
she got mad at him and there was a big fight
she yelled and he had no idea what to do
after the fight he couldnt stop cryin he just felt like dieing
she said we r not together anymore we r just frends
ill be bac with you if you destroy mt swarn enimie
kayseen did what creenta told him to do
and they went on a date
when they were on the date jensi and presan came
jensi made things worse and kayseen wanted to join the fun
but creeta got mad at him and tied him to a gaian tree and beat him no mater what he didnt sheed a singal tear cuz he new creeta still loved him
after the crazyness kayseen ask creenta to marry him but she said no
she said he had one more chance left
kayseen tried his best to find the most privet place
while on the date they went swimming and told some secrates like how they feel about each other
when they were finished swimming the went to there hotel room and played tag
while in the tag game they kayseen was kissing and huging her he felt so happy to b with her
when they were done playing tag kayseen perposed to creenta and she exepted
it was the happyest moment in kayseen's life
- by chococats FAN |
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- | Submitted on 01/10/2009 |
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- Title: the strenght of someone's love
- Artist: chococats FAN
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Description:
my gaian wife left me when i put this up and i cant stop thinking about her
this is like a fictional story of me and her
only it has different names
different places
idk what will happen next not complete
i miss her so much
(1 day later) we r bac toget her :) - Date: 01/10/2009
- Tags: strenth lovesome1
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Beroan10 - 11/07/2009
- if you tired a little more and worked on grammer and the story line it might make a good story.
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- A Cow goes Meow - 07/31/2009
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All though Pandalove is right about the one paragraph thing, she isnt very educated on writing because when your an other, visuals count more then gramical rules.
But shes still right. Its very messy. Srry, 2 stars - Report As Spam
- x__pandalove - 06/21/2009
- If you are going to write something at least have the decency to write it correctly. One line is not a paragraph! You need to learn how to capitalize words, use proper grammar, and basically learn the english language. I'm sorry for the reason behind the story, but I'm not sorry that you are a horrid writer.
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- Insane Chesire Cat - 06/09/2009
- Creenta sounds like a b***h :X Mind my language.
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- Caught-in-Wonderland - 05/27/2009
- This does need a lot of work it needs more adjectives and describe things a little more
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- vgaddict93 - 05/01/2009
- With a fair amount of revision, a discernible plotline, and detail, this has some potential.
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- Sparky328 - 04/16/2009
- srry, but i agree all the way with Sasori Luver 303. gomenesi, but it does need a lot of work (a lot is two words)
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