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waking up with you next to me,
recognizable even under the labyrinth of tubes which surround you;
you’re merely in need of a surge protector,
not a surgery.
i find myself back in the waiting room
where sticky fists take custody of stubby crayons.
in your room, i could at least try
to make a song out of the dissonance of beeps
emanating from each closed curtain.
i have watched your body crack along its fault lines,
watched the squiggles of your successes
play tug-of-war
across the computer screen.
but the intricacies of infections seem so tangible
when i compare them to the transience of the
fleeting memories i have of you
asking if watermelon trees would grow someday
as you spat their seeds into the grass.
i look up at the fluid above your head,
forming endless droplets just before
they chase each other
into the coffee straws
which i am dismayed to find
are your veins.
- by lee and sweden |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 01/31/2009 |
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- Title: the hospital never sleeps
- Artist: lee and sweden
- Description: I wrote this in my Intro to Creative Writing class in college. It was my workshop poem.
- Date: 01/31/2009
- Tags: hospital never sleeps
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- Reon Akida - 04/13/2011
- 5 stars hands down.
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- abdel1211 - 03/07/2011
- very good =) 5/5 my only complaint was you lost alot of impact with the missing grammar and punctuation =) overall 5 stars
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- Archaic Druid - 05/02/2010
- I admire and respect your use of free-form, but please capitalize where appropriate. Correct grammar is just as important as syntax and diction.
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- Xxsorrow_memoriesxX - 08/07/2009
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- Doggys bloody requiem - 07/29/2009
- biggrin yay! this is awesome! you can really imagine this well. 5/5 for u! :3
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- AyaneSakura101 - 07/11/2009
- interesting...
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- faNny_MAnNy - 05/11/2009
- hey read my story is call rick and me
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